Do you think this is moving to fast?

yeah i agree with you its a bit to fast paced. Some stories are like that though, but for me I always find that annoying - fast paced stories. But its funny cause when I write I have the exact same problem. I TELL instead of SHOW, which is what I need to do and I think same with you. Just slow it down a bit, describe things a bit more. Theres never to much detail. Good Luck!!